i tryed

• Artist: what_bout_you
• Description: this is about my friend who died
  so its from the heart i hated writing this becouse it caused me so much pain,
  i dont think its very good but yea
  
  please comment
• Date: 11/29/2008
• Tags: tryed

the flicker of life
in your pearl like eyes
life fading
from the once lively way

the causing of life
no meaning to me
my last words to you
so full of hatred
now so far away
i just wish you were here
to turn my life into something worth living.

Comments

[KhairiRaiin]

i love it. its full of the emotion. you really know how to make people feel how you feel when they read this. good job. 5/5

[Mistlan]

I think it's very expressive.

[xiSnapplezx]

I like it.
4/5 good effort!

[emokitty12345]

it is ok.