Lies Between Lines.

• Artist: b00_2
• Description: These are the first 3 sentences of my story. I posted this in the OS/P furum, but nobody read it. I'm desperate for feedback. It will only take 2 minutes or less of your life.
• Date: 05/09/2009
• Tags: none

I felt like I was drowning in a vast toxic pool of naivety. The fragrance of ignorance poisoned the air. I could’ve swore I heard immaturity snickering.

Comments

[BlissfullSinner]

this is great so far continue continue please...

[UC Poika]

What happens after that?
This reads like poetry!!