Re-write

• Artist: ABluejay
• Description: The truth of the power of words
• Date: 03/16/2009
• Tags: rewrite

The books of history...
The words of memories
can be changed
and rearranged
and no one would stop to think
about the gaps between the links
between the past and now
about what happened, and how

With the stroke of a pen
can come the end
of the endeavors of our ancestors
and sacrifices of our protectors
with the rearranging of words
hides the truth of ANY rebirth
and our "saviors" promises of peace
will be twisted with deciet


and erasing a single sentance
can bring forth enslavement
upon the human race

Comments

[290DarkStars]

Most of your rhymes failed you. such as "think" and "links".
"pen" and "open" "words"and "rebirth". I had trouble visualising the concept of this.... poetry is not what you write about, but how you deliver it. you deliverd it poorly in this case, dispite how good the moral was. nevertheless. . . it was aceptable... 3/5

[Bellatrix Scarlet]

I concur. Well written, I like the rythm of the poem.