Venting

• Artist: ObsessiveTexter
• Description: i need to let this out the best way i know how. its over the things that have been in our text messages lately
• Date: 12/29/2008
• Tags: venting

i find him in every corner of my mind
there has to be some thing to find
i look for him everywhere i seem to go
but he's never there, i know
too much going on in my head
i blankly stare as i lie on my bed
my journal full of sentences of him
brings tears to my eyes everytime i read them
i always babble on
so i sing a sad song
doesn't distract me for long
if he could hear all the things i say
i know it'd take his breathe away
i stand there in pain and whimper
try to think when things were simpler
i know this is the end
do i dare to press 'send'?

Comments

[Killa-Keyblade Master-]

Not bad not bad! I love rating these things. If you could, work on spacing your sentences, like put gaps into the ones that give the readers eyes breathing space. All in all this reflects your personal style, and I can see that, so 4/5. Good job.