Lost Words In The Wind

• Artist: Zerosplit
• Description: I wrote this in a storm, I couldn't sleep and I wasn't feeling good and I knew that if nothing else the rain and wind would embrace me and they would listen. So I walked in the storm and I talked and this is what I said.
• Date: 12/13/2008
• Tags: lost word wind crying love

Can you hear it wind?
They're killing me
That sudden sharp sound
Was my souls last scream.
Can you hear them wind?
They're coming soon
When they've broken your spirit
What else can you do?
Can you hear her wind?
Crying crystalline tears
She was much like me
But bound by her fears.
Can you hear me wind?
These are my last words
I tell them to you
Because I doubt she heard.
I loved her you know,
Can't you hear it wind?
When I tell her ill be
By her side till the end.

Even you wind I
Know, would be surprised,
To hear anything other
Than goodnight in reply
... Because after all
She is one of them.

Comments

[whitejade13]

oh I like it very much. Excellent! 5/5 Don't change a thing.

[Zerosplit]

Thank you all for the comments and yes yuki I will read yours.

[pure pyro 32]

you call it rough . i don't see how .seems good to me. the end in good . very effective . Also you should know when your work provides the feeling you want to express . so your judgement was correct you did know it would be effective . good work

[shywarrior]

BRILLIANT! Excellent and so beautiful. Love it. Good job Zero

[Rainbow Marchenko]

Beautiful :] and the ending is just right.

[Alibis of the Heart]

like it a lot^^
You expressed your emotions very clearly in this piece! Brilliant!!!
If you don't mind, could you take a look at my work? Thank you.