The Beautiful Swan

• Artist: Voice_Of_The_Siren
• Description: i wrote this in the third grade it was my first peice ever and ive decided to share it. short but sweet this is when im in a good mood
• Date: 11/22/2008
• Tags: beautiful swan

once upon a time
there was a beautiful swan
who liked to sing a sweet summer song
all who heard it
tall and small
luved to hear it
all summer long

the wind blowing
trees swaying
smells all around
sweetness devine
no tears no sadness
no heartbreak no hate

Comments

[BaileyLUV12]

i find it hard to believe that you wrote this in the third grade because you used words like devine and heartbreak. not trying to be rude.. i mean it's good and all but when i was in third grade i knew words like foot, dog, and cat.
4/5 (needs a little work)

[KOE House Mule]

BOA!!!!! 4/10

[HeartInHandNotInMouth]

wow very good poem for a 3 yr/o nice work. but id like to see poems from your present