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My Last Goodbye
The walls enclosing
The doors are closing
My heart is racing
My love is leaving
Now i am left
With my theft
To go and die
As my heart may cry
To say my last goodbye
As i get so high
I jump
And end in a thump.
Fin
- by Minty Strawberry |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/10/2008 |
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- Title: My Last Goodbye
- Artist: Minty Strawberry
- Description: Its a bout a girl who commited suicide because her husband or boyfriend left her.Please vote fairly tis my first time. =]
- Date: 10/10/2008
- Tags: last goodbye
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Im_CRAZY_random - 12/21/2008
- ahh-mazing! luv it girl.
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- XdragonrunesX - 12/21/2008
- it feels as though the rhyming was forced... enclosing and closing are too close together
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- PikachuPanda - 10/12/2008
- awesome...very deep. luv it
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- Minty Strawberry - 10/12/2008
- nothing rhymes with jump >.<
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- Lekituzl - 10/12/2008
- I liked it, but the thump part kinda ruined the seriousness. X3
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- Minty Strawberry - 10/12/2008
- thanks for everyones support ^_^
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- Arylaide - 10/11/2008
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Ah, not bad :3 For a first attempt anyways.
Looking forward to future writings <3 - Report As Spam