Love You, Forever

• Artist: Mugetsu Ookamiza
• Description: I first shared this online on the anniversary of the loss of a dear friend who, if circumstances had been a little different, could have become something more.
  
  this is a poem that has been percolating in my head for years. the first part actually came to mind back in '94 or '95. later I gathered all together, mucked about with the order and rhythm and came up with a fairly finished product. (ignore the "year's" typo, it won't let me correct it)
• Date: 07/18/2008
• Tags: poem love loss forever

If there's one thing I could say
Then it's 'please don't go away'
'Cuz I'll love you, forever

Every night and every day
Every breath and every way
Gonna love you, forever

Lying in your arms that night
Nothing ever felt so right
Wanna love you, forever

And now even though you're gone
The memory still is strong
'Cuz I love you, forever

As the years go flying by
I still think of you and sigh
My dearest love, forever

Looking back upon these years
the smiles were worth the tears
My truest love, forever

I know deep within my heart
We will never be apart
You and I, love, forever

Comments

[michellie-87]

very good, I really like it

[Elza xxx13]

very touching poem bout love... i jus simply luv it...

[Hane no Kori]

I really like it. I understand the whole tying it together with the word 'forever' and that really shows what the poem is about. Otherwise, there's just one tiny error I'd like to point out. In the third-last verse, you have an apostrophe in 'year's'. It's probably just a typing error, but I thought I'd mention it.

[Chocol8Chips]

After reading ur description, it made the poem more sad (at least to me..........) It's a nice poem tho ^^

[cobra_wwe]

I like it all around but repetition just doesn't go hand in hand with songs and poems unless you have it at the beginning and then again at the end. But after every stanza is over using the word which stresses the poem.

[Crystalinemoon]

oh yea loves it <3

[Crystalinemoon]

I understand the reason for forever to be repeatedand it just makes sense ^^. keeps the beat