The Life Of Me -Chapter 1-

• Artist: gguky
• Description: What the Title Says
• Date: 02/07/2010
• Tags: life

I glanced over at the clock on the wall. It clicked slowly. I sighed and turned back to my writing. I stared down at my poor poem.

While The Sun Shines Down On Me i Think of you, do you think of me?

"Ugh," I ground and looked out the window. The tree's swayed side to side. I bit my lower lip. I swollowed and sat up. I tipteod over to the staircase. "Honey where are you going?" My mom shouted over the boiling water. "Up to my room to think," i lied. "Mmk," she sighed and kept cooking. I ran up the long stair case to my room. I looked at the pictures on the white wall. My 2nd birthday. My fifth birthay. My tenth birthday. and my boy friend Leaf. I sighed and ran up to my room. The least thing i wanted now was to work with something bad going to happen soon.

Comments

[linymae]

Sounds good, only you need to proofread. "I" is always capitalized, and you have some other grammar mistakes, consistency problems, and wrong words at places. Still, it sounds fairly good so far, so 3/5.