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• Artist: Invalid Human
• Description: This is a poem that I wanted to write to help people go further since some people, like many of my friends, are afraid and they dont have enough confidence to put a little more effort than they do and they dont appreciate their tallent. So please, if someone insults you on what you do, dont take it personal and keep going, dont let anyone stop you, take it as a challenge.
  Please comment on how I can improve! Thanks :D
• Date: 12/11/2008
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The essence of life itself is never something
It is never good or bad
Better or worse
Luck or misfortune
Good or evil
It is the value itself that counts
Without this we wouldn’t appreciate anything
When you hear, it brings you something, a gift
A gift to make music
When you see things, it brightens your imagination
Imagination to be creative
When you speak, it allows you to go further
And sing how you feel to others
So never underestimate your skills and talent, but let yourself go further until you have achieved yourself

Comments

[Your Personal Stranger]

The poem doesnt flow ery well, try to avoid repeating words, and try to make it Rhyme. rhyming isnt a nesscesity, but it makes poems flow so much better.

[popsinger102]

Very,very nice.I wright some...not alot actually
but u get a 4/5 for 1 reason.
wrong catigory,sorry

[Espyyon]

i love where you're going with this i really do but i know you can touch down deeper into someone i just know it but i think it's a 4/5 you can do so much better !

[Amaka18]

That is a very elegant peom. I see it opening hearts and giving people a reason to right. The first two lines even caught my eyes. You can right poems well.

[Lotus_BIade]

Nice poem ^_^

[tygercat222]

that's deep man

[Holy angel1441]

nice poem!! I'm a poet myself. Can u give me a few tips?? smile