the freeway

• Artist: zslasher999
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• Date: 07/17/2008
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Driving down the highway I see an accedent. I stop. the car abbandon accept for a dead women in the drivers seat. then I hear crying. I look over the rail and down a few feet was a g teenage girl. I go down to her. I talk to her. she is a 14 year old named Hannah and im 19. I call the police. she stays with the police.she has no family accept her dad who killed her mom. I take her in. A few weeks later we get married. its the only way we can stay together. I love her and she loves me.





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Comments

[Goth n Rainbows]

It's OK. It would have been better to write a bit more to show how well you write and more feeling would've been great.

[Twilamare Neter]

If you worked on the grammar and spelling, you might have gotten a 4. Anyway, It's a nice attempt. Writing is good to practice daily, I hope you continue to grow as a writer!

[Xredd_crayonX]

The idea is good, but you should work on your grammar, and decribe. Example^instead of she is a 14 year old named Hannah and I'm 19, You could say, she say's she's 14. We talk in a little conversation. I tell her i am 19.

[katern]

okay i guess