moment of insanity

• Artist: BD Veloco
• Description: moment of insanity
• Date: 09/10/2014
• Tags: moment insanity

isn't interesting to say nothing but to say something

most people reply "just good things are fine"

when really there is a million words behind that 'fine'

then one would push, cause one can see well

one would just say something to mislead "just the usual"

what is the usual? a wall..

so people can hide so they don't fall

so they think people are strong and stand tall

to trust what people are going to see

the real part of your philosophy

to detail your pen written story

or reveal your unspoken tragedy

to even see their wildest fantasy

behind a mask of necessity

because of judging society

you see?

in my moment of insanity

wake up to whats around

look into the depths of your town

whether its small or colossal

new aged or fossil

one would just say something to mislead "just the usual"

then one would push, cause one can see well

when really there is a million words behind that 'fine'

most people reply "just good things are fine"

isn't interesting to say nothing but to say something

Comments

[fruit4you]

I love the idea behind the poem that's why I'm giving it a 4/5 But your poem sounds very formal and eloquent. That means you shouldn't shorten or make slang for words like "Because" to "Cause. And use too many conjunctions like "isn't" "Is not" Fits your tone better. I hope you keep writing, you're pretty spiffy. smile