Mist

• Artist: Faolan14
• Description: A short poem that I wrote a while back in response to a poetry game
• Date: 06/02/2011
• Tags: mist thoughts writing

Through the foggy veil of thought
and the cloudy traps of logic,
to misty places where ideas are wrought,
to places where imaginations frolic.

My mind has travelled this winding road
many times before today,
following a twisting, heedless code
that leads from gloomy night into shining day.

Comments

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it's "veil" not "vail" so next time spell-check. also, the diction feels too simplistic; if that's fine by you, no need to fix. but if it's not, and you want to really impact the reader with something deep, i'd consider choosing more precise words, expanding your ideas, 8/10