Love never Dies

• Artist: Voluntary Insanity
• Description: Something I wrote for someone I love.
  Fancy enough, I thought.
  
  Be respectful, and give constructive criticism for it is much obliged.
• Date: 05/10/2010
• Tags: love never dies

Unblinking eager eyes
a warm embrace to symbolize
that there will be no goodbyes.
Between gentle, lovely cries
our love never dies.
A whisper, quiet sighs.
Loving murmurs of surprise,
slowly filling with butterflies.
Gazing back with eager eyes,
I began to realize
despite each potential demise
our love never dies.

Comments

[ii-Samiiraii]

u are very poetic! gr8 poem!

[Idiosyncratic Quirk]

D: Do the common man a favor and make the font bigger.
Erm, now with the criticism. Your poem goes in a circle. Not a bad thing, but make it subtler.
Now, iono if it's just me, but the world "realize" in love poems and songs just take away from reading/hearing it.
Minus those self-perceived flaws, it's rather nice. :3

[Lunar_Rose12]

Awesome i really like and did you ever give it to that person