My heart goes out to you

• Artist: HaHaHarleen
• Description: I wrote this when one of my friends was really down
• Date: 10/11/2009
• Tags: heart goes pain here

My heart goes out to you
and all the things you do
that trail you left
uncovered, spread
and shame written on your face.
I can feel your pain
its deep in your veins
I can feel your tears
held back from years.
Your alone in this world
You never felt like this before
Undone, so wronged
My heart goes out to you.

I know what you dream
you feel like your slipping
down and away
with nothing to gain.
I know what you see
And it makes you insane.
Blessed or mistaken
your always forsaken
my heart goes out to you.

I can feel your screams
unheard in pain
It creeps at your skin
to know theres nothing to gain.
I can feel your mind
slowly slipping
fading and wasting.
My heart goes out to you.

I know you pray
day after day
I know what you say
To make you believe it was meant to be this way.
Your dying
Your falling.
Forever and never.
My heart goes out to you.

Comments

[HaHaHarleen]

because not everything has a happy ending, this isn't a story, this is an emotion. Poems are emotions, and this is what that emotion was, to put something like "and then you rise over everything coming your way" or whatever would not be part of the emotion

[Deadlylight6]

this is just my opinion but, poems like these usually start like how u did, showing compassion and telling a few things about how one person feels. but near the end it should be more uplifting and cheerful. i dont see cheerfulness. "your dying, your failing" not uplifting at all really...everything else is great but work on the ending. 4/5