<3Cross My Heart<3

• Artist: BumbleBee303
• Description: IDK i was bored and never writen a poem b4 so i thought it would be fun to try ....i rlly wanna no wat every1 thinks...im new at this and need sum input here<3 luvs ya
• Date: 06/22/2009
• Tags: cross heart love bumblebee

Cross my heart
and hope to die
I hate you
And you know why

when

you say pretty
I say fat
you say butiful
the fake smile on your face
what a discrace
you say perfect
i say why
silence in the deep blue sky

the very next day
you talk to your friends

they say pretty
you say fat
they say butiful
you just laugh
they say perfect
you say why
a long list goes by

cause

cross our hearts
and hope to die
we hate eachother
and we no why
@(0_0)@

Comments

[typhoon4eva]

Short and simple, which is cool since reading sucks. Good job.

[Glympse of Fate]

For a first poem it's great! You have some good ideas and content.
Suggestions: I would check your grammer. spelling, capitalization, and punctuation could be improved upon.