the purple rose

• Artist: fgtry657567567
• Description: a true love story and sad when two full in love
• Date: 04/06/2009
• Tags: purple rose

I am the the rage the fury that takes on worlds.
I can see the fire that rages through you.
I can see the beautiful violet rose inside ,and will change my hope for iternity and will be the bull that i can drink from.

Comments

[ddzgurl]

This is kinda boring. Like it seems like you started in the middle of it. Make it longer, it has good detail but it seems like an unfinish thought.

[Jarmis]

Yeah, it really looks like one big unfinished thought. It's like the whole theme of the poem changes two or three different times. Which, considering it's only four lines, is bad.

[critic-the-homeless]

ummm.... eternity is spelled wrong and that peomis kinda boring... 1/5