Of My Own Stupidity

• Artist: Shuri Umi
• Description: Dedicated to: N
  
  
  
  I know you think I'm annoying, but please read it anyway.
• Date: 04/02/2009
• Tags: stupidity

Too many years
I've gone and forgotten
I've caused tears
mostly mine
Hatred filled me
I see that now
Anger, I see
I regret, but how
can I change the past
what is gone
what is last
sadness filled my bones
as I poured me on pages
Now a civil war wages
within my own mind
You were so kind
I see that now
I can change it, but how?

Comments

[Shuri Umi]

wow, that's intelligent.

you don't have a CLUE what I've done to destroy my life.
My life is wrecked, and it's not because of you, even though you were probably SO hoping that it was.
I wrecked my life, and constructive criticism is better than anything. You were doing well when you suggested flow.....then you had to go to the Africa bit.

[Captain_Axiom]

Wow....You know, when you make something rhyme, you don't force it. You try to make it flow, have good meter. Make it enjoyable to listen to...honestly...

yeah, I do know exactly why you wrote it. All that jazz.

You're in pain? Do you have a horrible, treatable disease but you aren't able to have it treated like a starving child in Africa? You make me sick. Move on, Honestly, it's pathetic.

And get some new insults. Smart one? Time out corner? I'm honestly going to vomit of disgust.

[Shuri Umi]

i ws trying to make it rhyme, smart one!!!!!!

it's written to someone...that won't care either way
so there's nothing i will lose from trying this out and you have no idea what regret and pain i feel for what i've done.
you don't know what i've done, and you don't need to.
all you need to know is that i'm in pain, and you should go back to your time out corner before mommy gets mad at you for leaving!

[Captain_Axiom]

Ohhhh godd you make me sick...because it's...so good. Obviously. Reminds me of like, Yoda or something...Anger, You see?

Don't quit your day job...or do, because you'll probably get hurt on the job...by angry people you wrote poems to...