- Your eyes always wet with the ghost of your past. Your eyes of the coolest blue, I never rue the days i spend with you. I will always love you i am being true.
- by Brennan096 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/27/2009 |
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- Title: Your eyes
- Artist: Brennan096
- Description: Just a poem i just thought of about this girl i am in true real love with!
- Date: 03/27/2009
- Tags: your eyes
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- Raynai - 04/04/2009
- Sweet and to the point. smile I would suggest putting some enters in there to start new lines and draw the reader's attention to where you rhymed. It will also add volume to your poem, which can help the reader remember it. Also, watch those punctuation errors--they can kill ya!
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- jizzguzzler - 03/31/2009
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Very well done. 4 stars.
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- irresistably_supernatural - 03/29/2009
- Very sweet. Not many ppl can say they truly love someone and mean it. This portrays your soul and heart. Bravo.
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