All Alone

• Artist: CravesTheMoon
• Description: i just put it in, its really my life. i never made a poem. so heres mine for the first time. tell me what u think....
  
  
• Date: 03/24/2009
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I'm all alone in this place we call Earth.
The joy was swept under my feet.
My life is just a peice of dust in the great big attic of the world.
Alone.
That's me.
Why o Why me?
I'm stading here, forgotten.
All my friends have left me for others.
My own teachers look through me like i'm not there.
What is it about me that people think i don't exist?
i don't know, why don't you tell me.
Oh yeah, i'm not there.

Comments

[Valoralin]

not bad but this is sad i hope you really don't feel like this :'(

[rocko11091]

not bad...not bad at all...a few pointers though before i subject you to my rating explanation....for one, please spell check before submitting somethign....there is little i hate more than reading a good poem and then, BAM, right out there all of a sudden, a typo....also, try to use more figurative language...i like the metaphor of the piece of dust, try to use more like it...imagery could be better too...it is a poem, yes?...but overall, not bad...try using my suggestions and it'll be better..

[darklord Revan Uchiha]

eh not bad

[MyNameIs-Scrotes]

I feel sorry for you...it used to not be that way with either of us, I just know it...