Epiphany of Loneliness

• Artist: Zerosplit
• Description: Hmm... This one has always been a headache for me. This was written in parts, I would be sitting around and a small piece would pop in my head and I would write it down. This is the product of some of those pieces but it's still a bit rough. The rhyme scheme changes after the first stanza but that is also where the tone goes from defeat to desperation. He desperately needs something but he doesn't know what it is, in the end he decides it's nothing.
• Date: 03/09/2009
• Tags: epiphany loneliness defeat desperation darkness

Is this not what it takes
For me to have you?
Is this only just a phase
That I’m going through?
I need help, I’m in pain
I don’t know what to do.
I am hurt, full of shame,
And it’s all cause of you.
You took my heart, stole my soul,
Left me broken in two.
I am lost and alone,
I just feel so confused.

I need help, I need saved
But no one’s on their way.
I glance back but too late
I am lost, can’t escape.
Walk this road all alone
With no way to get home.
Each way I take has no end,
Don't know where to begin.
I sought death but he left,
Said it's all just a test.
But it's tough, it's too much
I don't know who to trust.

People see but they deny,
Can't even look into my eyes.
It'd only do to confirm their fears,
They'd see my soul drowning in tears.
But I have pride and shrug it off
Turn my back and hide a cough.
Glance at them and stand up straight
In that moment accept my fate.
I am meant to be alone,
Walk these roads all on my own.
All my fears then set aside
Because that was when I truly died.

Comments

[Lilith Kokos]

part one and part three you were truly outstanding, it simply amazed me (even though it was a sad and gloomy poem.... those are my favs) you could have done better in the middle, like when it says " I am lost can't escape" maybe you should think about making shorter like " I am lost, can't escape" instead. i dunno, just a thought but other than that it is truly exquisite... ^_^ wuved it.....reallly

[Zerosplit]

Thank you all very much ^.^ this is what encourages me to submit and write more!

[WorIds]

i absolutely love it!i agree with ruth_lalap...5/5!

[White_Snow_Princess09]

I have you 5/5
it was good and lovely ..

[Zerosplit]

Thank you ^.^ I'm glad you enjoy it.

[Hikaru1214]

good...-_-

[Reprogrammed]

I'm in love with the title. The poem is awesome. I simply love it. 5/5