death by love

• Artist: drummer_chick_777
• Description:
• Date: 12/13/2008
• Tags: death love

I....cant feel much
If...I can feel anything,
your coming, closer now,
and you just threw me away.....for her

and how could you expect,
me to be the same, nothing could ever make me forget,
how you tortured me with sweetness
then you left me lying defeated, by you my old love
nothing will ever compare, the way you made me feel
I self-loathed, devoted and died.


I felt abandoned and it was by you
all of my loathing I did it for you
I thought you would be there time after time
nothing will be there your no longer mine
and now I cry and yell by death im awake
nothing could extricate the feel the warmth the happiness
the hate the love the rightousness


I need my space, and I feel replaced
your no longer with me dont call me your friend
I want to die...and break down and cry
everythings spinning I think I am dead

Comments

[XXsexxy_drummerXX]

5/5

[iStab Crayons]

I get it 4/5

[Tomoko Seaki]

Awesome! 5/5!

[CazzyxBear]

Omg. Aside from a little bit of editing this is very good. The only problem i have with it is its overdone abit. The title is perfect and the words are too. the flow needs a bit of work i think, you should use caps and there are comma's that dont feel right but otherwise this is a very good piece of writing. 4/5 love <3 good job