One's Own Idea

• Artist: Derian Ardor
• Description: yeah poetry.com submission lol I am drudging up a lot of my past tehse days lol
• Date: 10/20/2008
• Tags: ones idea

I have my thoughts,
i have my mistakes,
I do things i should not do,
but i think like all of you,
i can make a joke,
i can learn from my mistakes,
but what i love about the world is,
my idea's are my own,
yours are as well,
but in a world of a teen,
a mind is a thing,
where i create and live upon,
my own designs and wonderings,
i live with my self,
with my decisions,
i make a world of my own,
and then i fit everyone in it,
i make my life,
i make my world as do other's,
but my ideas are my own.

Comments

[Derian Ardor]

yeah it was before i got an education pretty much lol. bt it is best in this form...i think. but yeah i agree. (and yes this comment has crappy grammer too)

[deathbed92]

It's true, I like it. I agree with MischiefWolf, as well.

[Mischiefwolf]

strange..You need a grammer lesson. I like the idea but you didn't exspress it well. Needs more sentance structure and capitalization. Show more emotion when you write.