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She loves him,
But, he loves me,
Can't they see?
Their perfect for each other,
Please, exclude me.
- by Whiskey on Ice |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/19/2008 |
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- Title: Untitled
- Artist: Whiskey on Ice
- Description: I wrote this one night when i couldent sleep, it just kinda came to me. I want to see what everybody thinks and how much work it needs. :sweat:
- Date: 10/19/2008
- Tags: untitled
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Comments (5 Comments)
- panda_bear008 - 10/19/2008
- I like this one. It's very simple and to the point, and while normally I'd probably agree with Jenni that you should add onto it, I actually think it has more of an impact the way it is. So good job. =]
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- AssKetchum - 10/19/2008
- the rythm is good, but you should add onto it! then it would be perfect :3
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- Whiskey on Ice - 10/19/2008
- haha, yeah i fixed it razz
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- onceuponatiger - 10/19/2008
- u put them in opposite places but its nice.
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