If Walls Could Speak

• Artist: temporarymisfortune
• Description: This was written when I was 12, now I'm 15. I went through a lot when I was younger, and I wasn't really the best writer. So critique me all you can.
• Date: 10/04/2008
• Tags: walls could speak

If walls could speak
they'd say hello
they saw me not breathing
and my life begin to close.

If walls could speak
they'd say i wasn't alone
that there are others out there
who will actually care

If I could speak
I'd tell them to shut up
I have cried so many tears
I dont wanna be here

See the problem is
People dont care
they walk on by
as if I'm not there.

So I might as well
not be so in need
because people will just look at me
and watch me bleed.

Comments

[f u m o k ii]

beautiful message. many people can relate to this, so i agree with Light. you have great potential~ :] we're looking forward to hearing more from you.

[-LightCaster-]

personification is present but you need to improve on being poetic. considering your age, you have great potential. keep on practicing,