Life Planned Out

• Artist: The Vampire Julius
• Description: fate hates you
• Date: 07/22/2008
• Tags: fate life misery

birth

no one at your side to feed you
nobody to take care of you

childhood

sweetheart taken by a bully
love lost

adolescence

all the kids have dates and dance tickets-
you have one ticket left for your imaginary love

adulthood

life spent working at a convenience store
need to rob the cash register to pay for food

death

finally, an end to misery

Comments

[areyououthere]

if these sentences are all separate poems, they are too weak by themselves; together, they make somewhat sense at what you're trying to portray, however, it fails due to the lack of stronger imagery and the cheesy ending.

[mkjhfd]

its the truth and i like it..so ill give u 5