Sins of the Earth

• Artist: sunnybrook
• Description: Despite the grunge of the daily grind I always manage to find some part of my day that has been lucky or blessed - although some days are harder than others. Yet I often wonder at the mortality of it all. I believe there is a life after death, but what does that make the life we live now?
• Date: 07/18/2008
• Tags: sins earth desire dream morals

Who am I to want these things?
A car that runs, a bird that sings,
a silver key to lock the door,
the wings to let me spin and soar…

A life ruled by needs and desires?
…the fuel to feed creative fires,
the love of one returned tenfold,
a book to read, my dog to hold…

What’s most important in this world?
…a mystic beast with wings unfurled,
a quilt well-worn, lovingly mended,
a story that’s been happily ended…

Who is the judge of right and wrong?
…my own true voice, raised up in song,
the nature of power we all realize,
the truth to unseal everyone’s eyes…

Is love blind and is hope dead?
…a time for words that must be said,
a place to dwell and watch the storm,
to touch a lover’s tight, lithe form…

Can I trust myself, my choice?
…a steady light, my mother’s voice,
the chance to go beyond my best,
a life of laughs, some time to rest…

Is who I am because of these?
…a nap beneath some shady trees,
a child watching cage-less birds,
a host of minds to hear my words.

Comments

[sunnybrook]

Off the wall? Not sure what to make of that - only I've added it because it's important to me. Maybe the weirdness comes from the way I've structured the poem overall. I meant it to be two different threads of thought - separated by punctuation but connected by rhyme, one questioning and the other contemplating.

[reapersuns manfriend]

This has got to be the best poem I've read all night.
I tried hard to look for the forced points, and saw none. Well, the "mother's voice" thing is alittle off the wall, but besides that, it's absolutely spectacular. 5/5!

[The_Schizophrenic_Psycho]

niceeeeeeeeeee beasting poem

[cam94509]

Nice poem!

[E d i b l e F l o w e r]

Beautiful poem, the first and last stanzas in particular are wonderful. I'd say the only drawback is that at times it seems like you are trying too hard to make each line rhyme, and as result, it becomes a bit choppy and forced.
However, its just a little bit, and overall I'd say its one of the better poems I've read in some time ^__^

[Awesome_Red_Fox]

this poem is the besst