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Broken Wishes
Wish upon the falling star
Oh, wow, it’s very far.
Just a few million miles between us.
Little star, we have much to discuss.
I’m very unhappy with your service,
And you’re starting to make me nervous.
I’ve been wishing every night,
The same wish, the same dream.
Was this star not right?
Do I need to choose another ball of light?
If so, alright.
Okay, new star.
I’ve searched the sky all night
Just to find you.
This time, I hope I’m right.
I had the biggest and brightest
Of you all.
But now I’ve chosen the slighest;
I wanted someone small.
Little star, can you help me?
Help me with my wish.
It’s been broken for a long time now,
Drown in the lake with all of the fish.
But I think it can be saved,
With a little help from you.
If I promise to behave,
Would you sprinkle your magic dust upon me,
So I can finally be free?
Little star, will you answer my plea?
Little star, can you handle this task?
Little star, can you handle me?
From the same author who brought you the previously submitted Unspoken Message and Lost in the World.

- Title: My Broken Wish
- Artist: Nikki4815
- Description: This is a mule account. PM me if you want my real name, or if you like my poems. I might give you some not-yet-released stuff. ^^ Today is Monday. I decided that I will try to post a new poem every Monday. We'll see how that goes. Links to my previous poems are at the bottom of this one, so you can get there faster ^^ I'm starting a mailing list. I will PM the people on it every time something happens that is worthy of you being alerted. PM me if you want to join it. See you all next Monday.
- Date: 12/08/2008
- Tags: broken wish
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Charioteer - 12/10/2008
- 5/5 i think it's really cool; the non-consistent helps i think. it leaves you thinking.
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- Adderall Sleep - 12/10/2008
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I'm a little confused as to what you're trying to do with the un-rhythmic pattern.
It's a cute poem, but you need to work on your diction and structure.
3/5 - Report As Spam
- cas1995 - 12/10/2008
- Oh my gosh you've blown me away AGAIN ! Keep up the good work
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- bOSz_livin - 12/09/2008
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LOVe Ett!...
JSt LYk dA RESt...
5/5 - Report As Spam
- Aya-Whitewater - 12/08/2008
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omg i love it 5/5
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- The Darke Assassin - 12/08/2008
- Wow I like this one. It is really awesome. You are really good. I have a few poems in here but I don't think they are that good.
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