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<br />The first time I walked<br /><br />
With a girl, I was twelve,<br />
Cold, and weighted down<br />
With two oranges in my jacket.<br />
December. Frost cracking<br />
Beneath my steps, my breath<br />
Before me, then gone,<br />
As I walked toward<br />
Her house, the one whose<br />
Porch light burned yellow<br />
Night and day, in any weather.<br />
A dog barked at me, until<br />
She came out pulling<br />
At her gloves, face bright<br />
With rouge. I smiled,<br />
Touched her shoulder, and led<br />
Her down the street, across<br />
A used car lot and a line<br />
Of newly planted trees,<br />
Until we were breathing<br />
Before a drugstore. We<br />
Entered, the tiny bell<br />
Bringing a saleslady<br />
Down a narrow aisle of goods.<br />
I turned to the candies<br />
Tiered like bleachers,<br />
And asked what she wanted -<br />
Light in her eyes, a smile<br />
Starting at the corners<br />
Of her mouth. I fingered<br />
A nickel in my pocket,<br />
And when she lifted a chocolate<br />
That cost a dime,<br />
I didn't say anything.<br />
I took the nickel from<br />
My pocket, then an orange,<br />
And set them quietly on<br />
The counter. When I looked up,<br />
The lady's eyes met mine,<br />
And held them, knowing<br />
Very well what it was all<br />
About.<br />
<br />
Outside,<br />
A few cars hissing past,<br />
Fog hanging like old<br />
Coats between the trees.<br />
I took my girl's hand<br />
In mine for two blocks,<br />
Then released it to let<br />
Her unwrap the chocolate.<br />
I peeled my orange<br />
That was so bright against<br />
The gray of December<br />
That, from some distance,<br />
Someone might have thought<br />
I was making a fire in my hands.My Comments.<br /> - Avg. rating:
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- Lady_Eldae - 07/20/2010
- I've also decided, that I hope you continue to critique me as harshly as you are. It's good contrast, even if it appears out of spite. It makes me consider things, but in all honesty, I already try far more than I should for these silly arena thingies, so I doubt it will force out anything more than a second thought. But still, continue. It will go down in history as the user who made the avatars, and the user that bashed those avatars, only for the maker to rise up in the end. I wish you luck.
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- Lady_Eldae - 07/20/2010
- I won't get dirty for you, I'm afraid. There is something of importance to try to remain stoic and intelligible. I'm sure you will just find it comical that I keep such practices in place, but I couldn't expect less from someone who is as dedicated to posting on how much this disdain my avatars as I am dedicated to making them.
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- Lady_Eldae - 07/20/2010
- I continue to comment to you because I have a strong urge to want to change something. I wish I could let you see that you can still relay to another person that you have a problem with something, without coming off as a complete jerk. You could actually give constructive criticism. Many people every week tell me things are wrong, mistakes, or just bad characters to cosplay. But none of these people offers alternatives. They don't realize that things cannot be mistakes if they were intended.
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- MiniMeow - 06/26/2010
- Aw sorry smile did you mean my one in the cosplay or org arena?
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- -The Fire Priestess- - 04/06/2010
- Haha. Wow. I'm so hated. <3
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- Ghostface genesis - 04/17/2009
- hey aim a christian now and i just wanted to apologize i hope that one day you could forgive me god bless you!!
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- Darling Princess Chii - 04/09/2009
- shut up youre just jealous you betch!!!! ministra did nothin n you go pissing her off thats not cool dudee
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