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I'll pretty much write about anything, im pretty spontanious :]
I kinda switched this one up a bit ;D If you've read my other poems, I usually do A,B,A,B (Rhyming pattern) This one, I did A,A,A,A :3 (This one our class dedicated to Dylan Thompson's Don't Go Gentle Into That Good Night) Living life to the fullest, don't know whatcha go til its gone. On the lines of that X]

We all share similar lives on earth
Hands in the dirt
Fair share of work
But why should it always end in hurt?

We are similar in ways
Mean what we say
Finish each day
But it ends in suffering anyway

We have our own mind
See with different eyes
But put these aside
And it still ends in fire

Shouldn't we remember
When we were each other's defenders
How we never surrendered
Wholesome people, no pretenders

My only wish is to see us join arm
The love and kinship being like sparks
Being united with one beating heart
Never seeing us draw apart

This ones a lot deeper than my other light and humorous stuff >.>
I am open to critisism. (If i can spell it right..>.> wink
Oh! and if you have any suggestions on rewording the last stanza, to make it sound smoother, (and less cheesey) It would be greatly appreciated!!

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