Crushes - a short, short story

• Artist: Polka-chan
• Description: English class, we had to come up with a short story that still giave some of a character's identity. therefore, I made up a story about Jack, a character who I'm using for several other writing projects, some of which will be on Gaia ^^
  I know the character's names aren't very creative, but I wanted to put a modern twist on the Jack and Jill stories, I mean, who says they're related in the nursery rhyme!
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  Constructive Criticism please?
  and yes, Jack is gay, Deal with it
• Date: 10/20/2009
• Tags: crush short jack jill crushes

"Cute, Hot"
Every girl's opinion of Jack.
Jill was no exception. With the support of her friends, Jill approached Jack.
"Hey jack!" Jill said, "want to get lunch with me?"
Jack hesitated, frowned, then agreed. After grabbing their lunches, they sat in the cafeteria with a bunch of Jack's friends. As the number of Jack's friend's dwindled, and Jill was about to ask him out, he introduced her to his boyfriend.