Well..today in class i had some nice 20 min to write a poem..and i sorta wrote this..plz tell meh if its good bad or anything..help me get a good grade on it...thankies...i must remind u..im not a poet so i have no deep s**t about poem and how to write them the proper way..i just write them...yeah..
"The Room"
The room that I'm in,
Smells like a cloud
Yet looks like a heaven
And plays a cold sound.
I walk to what seems to be door,
But once i touch it
It shrinks away.
The room that I'm in doesn't feel like a home
Of more does it feel like a space provided for me.
The room that I'm in
Is a simplest of matter called mind.
Please tell meh wats wrong with it...i really want to make this a good poem...thanks
 Evil_angel153 · Wed Dec 10, 2008 @ 10:35pm · 0 Comments |
