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far darkened is my mind
just word or quote that i feel should go here or there....an everywere
as the morning dawns (sry for any spelling errors )
The shadow hides my pale face under the moons waining glow.
My soul is drained with the fear of being allown.
My eyes drip with the skatered memorys of what I held so close.
My hands tremble at the site of the early morn.
I fall and wish for these days to be over
when I am not allown at last.
~Claudia stare
if only it were pssible






User Comments: [1]
Drake Elias Zephyr
Community Member





Thu Nov 25, 2004 @ 05:24am


Ooh! Pretty nice! Good wording, and the spelling mistakes aren't too bad. Sounds pretty deep. ^___^

Here are the spelling corrections, though!

Quote:
My soul is drained with the fear of being allown.

It's spelled "alone". =]

Quote:
My eyes drip with the skatered memorys of what I held so close.

That would be "scattered". Pretty good guess though =p

Quote:
My hands tremble at the site of the early morn.

This isn't really a spelling mistake. What you did wrong is that you used the wrong word since it sounds the same. However, "site" would be used for something else (Example: 'The site of the accident'). The one you're lookinf for is "sight". ^_~

Very good though =D


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