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currently posting: Lords of Shadow
Lords of Shadow: Part I
i'll be posting this in segments as i see fit, there is no such thing as chapters in any of my stories as of yet so quit yer whinin


“Kan? Could you get Miss Day from the nurse?”

Kan jerked his head up. “Sure.”

Kan strode down the hallway, thinking. Tanya sleeps too much during the day to be a normal human; it's almost as though she's an owl. He grinned. Or one of us.

Mr. Mandala walked by in the hallway and tapped his lip.

“Oops,” Kan retracted his oversized canine teeth and smiled charmingly at the equally charming teacher.

Mr. Mandala frowned and walked on. He taught the more advanced math classes at the high school, algebra II, probability and statistics, and calculus. His image was starkly black and white, with black hair, eyes, and clothing, with almost pure white skin. He looked like how many people would imagine a vampire. He also was Kan's adoptive father and a very powerful vampire among the nonhuman community, whereas Kan's only relatively vampiric characteristics were his black hair and fair skin. Kan's eyes were bright green and he dressed in whatever was clean and within reach, sometimes it coordinated, sometimes it didn't. He was also considered a freak by the vampires who either knew him or knew of him. Only a few didn't seem to care.

Damn, gotta watch that.

Kan reached the nurse's office.

“Mrs. Meyer? Tanya needs to come back to class,” he said.

The nurse looked up from getting an ice pack for a student. “She's in the far bed,” she told him.

Kan walked over to the bed and gently shook Tanya.

“Tanya? Mr. Long wants you to come back, now,” he told her.

“Mnnh.”

“I will pick you up and carry you,” Kan continued.

Tanya poked her head out from under the blanket. “You probably would, too,” she said, yawning, “All right, all right.” She sat up and stretched. “Stupid goody two-shoes,” she muttered.

Kan crossed his arms and flipped his shaggy black hair away from his face, his green eyes challenging. Tanya ignored him.

“Thanks, Mrs. Meyer,” Tanya said as she exited.

“Sure, Tanya,” she replied.

As they were walking back to class together, Kan studied Tanya out of the corner of his eyes.
She would fit in well, basically alienated from the rest of them, he thought. He took a deep breath. And her aura isn't purely human, either. Kan thought about the feel of her aura he'd gotten when he breathed. Faintly vampiric, with some unicorn and dragon, too.

“Kan? Something wrong?” Tanya had gotten ahead of him by a few steps.

“Hmm?” Kan jerked out of his reverie, “No, just thinking.”

Tanya walked back and joined him, “What about?”

“Oh, this and that, everything and nothing,” Kan told her. He studied her reaction to his words.
“That doesn't confuse you?” he asked when she only looked thoughtful.

Tanya shook her head, “No, it makes perfect sense, it's just a paradox.”

Kan was surprised. She was wise for a human, if she understood that.

Kan opened and held the door for Tanya when they returned to Mr. Long’s room for horticulture.

I'll talk to Ver about it, Kan decided.


“No, absolutely not.”

“But, she’s not purely human, Ver,” Kan argued, “I-” Kan stopped.

Mr. Mandala looked at Kan sharply, “You didn't do anything did you?”

Kan looked down, suddenly interested in his shoes.

“Kan?”

“All I did was breathe,” Kan said meekly.

“Kan,” Ver sighed and ran his hand through his black hair, “You should quit doing that, the last human you did that to caught a really nasty virus.”

“But she’s not human!” Kan exclaimed, “Or, at least, not purely. She has traces of vampire, as well as unicorn and dragon!”

Ver looked interested. “What was the dominant trace, besides human?”

Kan nodded, “Vampire.”

“Second?”

“Unicorn.”

“So the dragon would be the least dominant. I suppose that would be good, for us anyways.” Ver sat and thought for a minute.

“So…” Kan prompted.

“Don’t do anything.”

“What? Why!” Kan asked.

“Because she’s human. We don’t interfere with their lives, lest they find out about ours,” Ver explained.

“But she’s not human!” Kan argued.

“She was born and raised a human, she has human interests, and human characteristics. You will NOT turn her!” Ver shouted, standing up.

Kan bowed to the older vampire and exited the room.

“If the auric removal affects her at all, you're going to be the one to take care of it, Kanneric,” Ver told him.

Kan simply made a peace sign, not turning around.

critique much appreciated heart






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_delted_--mfrag
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commentCommented on: Sun Mar 22, 2009 @ 02:27am
wow....................the begining needs a little work, it seems rater forced. althoe, Im not one to say anything about intros........
but, ither than that , its realy realy good. I mean, I hate all vampier stories expt Dracula, and I have to say Id buy this and read it.
I realy like the peace sighn part.

also, like you said to me, a little more description would be nice


commentCommented on: Sun Mar 22, 2009 @ 02:28am
description???!!!! AAAAAHHHH!!!!!!!! *runs away screaming*



Kanneric Knite
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Kanneric Knite
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commentCommented on: Sun Mar 22, 2009 @ 02:29am
oh.......wait.............thats the unedited version DAMMIT!!!!!!!!!! *bangs my head on my desk* dammit dammit dammit


commentCommented on: Sun Mar 22, 2009 @ 02:34am
there, it's edited now GOD ******** DAMMIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! there, i feel better ^^;



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Lady Akasu
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commentCommented on: Sun Mar 22, 2009 @ 05:46pm
I rather enjoy your story. It's quite interesting, and it's different from most stories I've read... (that's partially because I normally read stories from people that can't write... >_> wink

Anyway, I'm looking forward to reading more. If you can add a little more detail, that would be appreciated. If not, it's completely fine. I don't exactly put tons of detail in my stories either. ^_^;


commentCommented on: Sun Mar 22, 2009 @ 05:51pm
yeah, i seem to have issues with details sweatdrop i'd rather let the reader use their imagination than practically turn it into a movie



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Sakuka
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commentCommented on: Mon Apr 06, 2009 @ 12:22am
as the othershave said, the begging needs a bit of spiffing it up, i think the detail is alright, but i was confused at the beggining as to what was going on


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