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tksunshine93's Poetry
This is just some of my poetry...some published some not
Just a little song or poem or whatever you want to call it that came to me while I was trying to fall asleep. I know it's not great but it sounds better as a song,sadly I'm not much of a composer so I didn't write a melody to go along with it. Any ways.....

If any of y'all can think of a title for this that would be greatly appreciated because for the life of me I can't think of anything. Thanks!! 4laugh

Here I stand
Someone come take my hand
Can't you hear
Come and remove my fear

You know
Who you are
You know
I've gone too far
You look so angry
I know
You have reasons to hate me
I'm sorry
For what I did
But can't you
Just please forgive

I'm begging please
Help me
I need release
Save me
And know the truth
Was only for you

You know
You're the only one
You know
Of all I've done
I feel so empty
I know
That you still love me
I explain
Everything I did
And you are
Learning to forgive

Here I stand
With you
Holding my hand
Thank you
I knew you'd hear
Now it's my turn
To vanquish your fears

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commentCommented on: Mon Dec 22, 2008 @ 10:06pm
okay i have only one suggestion in me

solitary confinement.

i don't know if it fits or not because you talk about other people
but the way you express your feelings does seem a little lonely.

commentCommented on: Mon Dec 29, 2008 @ 08:53pm
i still think "Take my hand" is a good title. How about "Of all i've done"? i like to use a line from the poem for the title generally...Good luck!

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