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Demonic Battlefield:Fight or Flight?
They braced each other with there swords and clashed. Cameron was hoping Serena, Ally, and Jason would flee. They just stood there. "Run"yelled Cameron as he was knocked to the ground. Cameron was bleeding from his chest. He slowly tried to get up with a sword in his face. He had to think fast he reached into his pocket and grabbed his pocket knife and striked at Garon's legs. Garon tripped and fell backwards. Cameron quickly got up and grabbed the others running as fast as his legs could carry him. They came into a very deep part of the forest. Cameron noticed up ahead. "Warning dangerous swamp ahead." A swamp?Cameron thought to himself. He remembered his younger brother and they stopped and turned in a different direction. They found a large tree where Cameron and the others settled for the night. Serena and Jason slept together. Ally slept alone by a tree. Cameron didn't sleep at all. He was too concerned about the safety of his younger brother. It had been ten days and still no sign of what had happened to him. Cameron saw a bright star in the sky. He wished he would find his brother safe and sound and soon. He dozed off into slumber. The next day he awoke but he wasn't in the forest he was in a cell, and Jason was with him. In the next cell Ally and Serena were. Serena hands and feet were chained. Cameron wondered where were they? How did this happen. But then he noticed he turned to look around the cell and there on the bed sleeping was Taz! He woke Taz up. "Taz it's me Cameron are you okay? Tell me where are we?"asked Cameron. Taz started crying and embracing Cameron his older brother. Taz could barely spit out the words. "Evil... people kidnap kids and demons and sell them for money. Help me brother. I wanna go home and see mommy and daddy again."Taz cried embracing Cameron once more. "I promise you I will get us all out of here alive and safe."Cameron whispered then he kissed his younger brother on the head. "I promise"

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  • User Comments: [1]
    Katu Khan
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    Sun Nov 18, 2007 @ 10:45pm


    Oh wow, this is pretty good. I also like to point out some errors. But I'll leave that to you. Look for spacing between qoutations and punctuation marks. Commas are needed someplaces...but the story is good. That's about it.


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