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 Posted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 10:39 pm
it started out as a poem, but now its a song i think... please comment if you feel like it.
THE RAIN HAS NEVER FELT SO GOOD BEFORE
the clouds
are cov'rin up the sky
looks like a storm's
a comin in
but i don't care because
my heart's broken in two
i trusted you
i loved you so
and this is how you
betray me
god, your lettin' the rain fall now
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(chorus)
there's rain drops fallin
from the sky
as the tears fall down my face
and they're washin all away
there's rain drops fallin
from the stars
the sky is gone
in all the gray
but crystal clear is the rain
the rain has never felt so good before
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i'm sittin on a bench
just lettin the rain
wash over me
its were she used to sit with me
before she disappeared
from my life
but even though im soaked through
i think i get the picture
now
the rain is washin all the
dreadful pain away
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(chorus)
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i think i'm better now
the sun is comin out now
all the rain is going away
and with it is the pain
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 6:25 pm
I can say that I wasn't expecting a post-brake-up song/teen-angst kind of thing, but I have no problem with that. Beyond punctuation (Capitals are very missing), I equally enjoyed the song and I found it quite easy to find rythem to it. My only problem about it was the first verse (I think that's what you call it) was quite...un-Intriguing to me anyways, although I think many people will find my thoughts diffrent from theirs.
The one thing I liked the most was how cryptic I found the last line to be, as I can't really decifer what happens really.
Better than most songs written from the heart (That no one gets paid for)
Although there are still a couple things to correct before you can actually make use of it (I would think, anyways)
Great job!
(If that happened to you like it did in the song, hoping the best for you!)
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 11:38 pm
I thought it was quite good myslef.
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Posted: Sun Jun 10, 2007 7:56 pm
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Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 1:49 pm
i liked it alot can really tell you put your heart in it
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