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 Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 6:13 pm
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 6:58 pm
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 6:59 pm
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 7:59 pm
Steven and I Very sad. The only thing I didn't really like about it was when you said, "It's alright, it's okay." That made the part sound like a cheer. Other then that, it's really good.
Taking a fall I didn't really like the ending of this one. Maybe you could turn it into a longer poem talking about how you went to the hospital and your boyfriend came to visit you every day and eventually proposed to you but then you died of head trauma or something. The ending that you have just seems like you were rushing to get the poem over with.
Once I ate a Crayola Crayon Very funny. A bit redundant with the "All of a sudden I felt..." so maybe you could change that but it's really cute.
Ichlarian Wants a Story I thought this one was cute too. There's really nothing wrong with it.
Help Me! It seems kind of short for a song but I like it otherwise. 3nodding
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Posted: Tue Oct 18, 2005 3:32 pm
Very nice, i liked them alot. heart
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Posted: Tue Oct 18, 2005 8:27 pm
ck4 *Sobs* I feel so sad now form just typing those up for you guys, I wrote them while I was almost dead in the hospital, I barely had the strength to write those crying wow i sometimes think about stuff in my head when i am depressed like why do i live and for what reason, but i ever write them down
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Posted: Thu Oct 20, 2005 3:01 pm
Nice ^_^ Some of them are a little sad though..I loved the one about the crayon though heart
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Posted: Thu Oct 20, 2005 3:20 pm
I liked the one where you said you 'woulda turned blue'... that was creative. that was the crayon one, wasn't it?
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Posted: Thu Oct 20, 2005 4:14 pm
explode555 I liked the one where you said you 'woulda turned blue'... that was creative. that was the crayon one, wasn't it? It was 3nodding xd
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