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 Posted: Tue May 08, 2007 7:22 am
I don't really know what this is, it was just kind of in my mind, so I wrote it :
"I sit here silently in the dark, waiting as each breath comes and goes. One leaves as a sigh, a heavy and regretful sigh. What have I done? If only I could've collected myself for a few moments more, would we still be like this? Would the fault still lie with me? Tell me, where would we be?"
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Posted: Wed May 09, 2007 6:49 am
Do what I do. Make it longer and more descriptive and then see what you can do with it. If you think it'd be better as a poem, turn it into a poem. If a story would work better with it, turn it into a story. The best part about being the author, you can do whatever you want with anything.
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Posted: Sun May 13, 2007 10:52 am
Much thanks. See, I sort of knew what I wanted it to be to begin with. My friend and I are going through a horrible fight that is all my fault and all I wanted to do was apologize, but then I realized that I really messed up and I didn't have the courage to tell her personally, so I wrote this, but couldn't bring myslef to give it to her. I'm lost and totally screwed. But again, thank you so much for the advice, it helps. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun May 13, 2007 7:13 pm
This is lovely.
True it does feel incomplete but is loaded with potential.
It could easily be a poetic work or a beginning to a short story.
Shall enjoy reading whatever you do arrange it into.
..................WildWildWindWhisperer wink ( Vice-Captian)
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WildWildWindWhisperer Vice Captain
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