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 Posted: Mon Jan 22, 2007 7:48 pm
A Poem To Judge In case you thought I wasn't listening,
you were wrong
In case you thought I didn't hear what was said
you were wrong
I was there
I heard it all
and you think your so clever for saying such things
but I know
I know how you hurt
how unhappy you must feel
and now know how special I feel
you took seconds out of your valuable life
to judge
to judge
me
well i'm sorry
but I liked it.
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Posted: Tue Jan 23, 2007 7:23 pm
It's interesting. Definatly not a bad poem but I wouldn't put it in the top ten either. The flow is kind of weird and it's somewhat choppy...I also don't understand the point of repeating "to judge" in the last part. Other than that, it wasn't bad. Keep up the good work!
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Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 12:25 pm
I'm not keen on the repetition of "to judge" in the last part but other than that, it's a good poem. When I read it, I imagined it to be lyrics. But I like it. Keep it up!
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Posted: Fri Feb 02, 2007 7:45 am
Hello! smile
Sending you a warm welcome from the guild.
This is pure and stark with a raw emotion.
I simply love it to pieces!
I understand the last part of making proclaimations of judgement.
"to judge
to judge
me "
It`s a loud ringing of... a screaming of...a breathless whispering of... Why judge, But you did judge, You should not judge, that neither person involved required it and that you understood it all. That possibly compassion and understanding would by everyone involved may have been the key... in stead of judgement from this person you speak of. The last part echoes a heartache, desire and a deep wishing.
I so get this poem! Thank you, for the kindness of your sharing it.
However, one minor item that I wish to mention. That being the lack of capitals and proper punctuation. Other than that it`s simply divine!
Sincerely.......
.........................WildWildWindWhisperer wink
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WildWildWindWhisperer Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 12:46 pm
The rhyming Feel and feel doesn't work, I get the message but you could be more clever in the writing it down, keep it up buddy. 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Aug 01, 2007 5:12 pm
Umm. It is nice but requires flow.....
...WildWildWindWhisperer wink ( Vice-Captian)
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