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 Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 9:38 am
the keeper
thy raven sits upon a tree
thy raven has yet to be
an internal keeper of souls
thy raven calls upon the dead
it calls for the ones who die from a burn
to the ones who died for there childerns life
thy raven sits upon a tree
and has yet to be
a keeper
-gonster120 mrgreen
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 9:40 am
any comments that you wish to put about it are good.
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 11:21 am
Interesting.
I think it could use a little neatening here and there if you dont mind me saying, but its a good short poem
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 3:03 pm
The lines are a little shaky but it's a good poem otherwise.
Also: I don't know if you've noticed or not yet but I edited your second post. This is a guild for literates so please make sure you type out your words and do what you can to spell correctly and type gramatically correct. Thank you.
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