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 Posted: Mon Sep 27, 2010 9:59 pm
This is the beginnig of a story i'm writing. Will people please criticize it? question
Sometimes you wonder as you lay there dying, would I have done something different if given the chance? Could I? That’s what happened when I saw my life before my eyes. I was dying. No way to stop it. This was all I could do. I’m sorry everyone. I failed everyone.
I waited as it took me slowly. A movie of my life unfolded before me. Me as a little kid with my family. Me as a teenager. That’s as far as my life went. The good die young. I don’t think I’m that good. I see the truth in front of me. God never cared for me. I was forsaken by Him. And that cleared my path in advance. I led this life anyway.
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Posted: Tue Sep 28, 2010 1:47 pm
O my gosh ur so deep and mysterious. I usually dont like dark stories but this kept me wanting to read more
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Posted: Wed Sep 29, 2010 6:03 pm
CottonPopKroo O my gosh ur so deep and mysterious. I usually dont like dark stories but this kept me wanting to read more Really? Thank you! razz
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Posted: Mon Oct 04, 2010 5:46 am
its the beginning of a gr8 story,with a gr8 and waitnng more start 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Nov 29, 2010 8:27 am
I need to hear more of this story, it sounds so good.
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