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this is a poem i wrote about someone i truly think I'm in love with. critique? praise? thoughts?

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Well I love everything about you
From the way you stand
To the way you always fidget with your hands
How you push your hair back when you talk
And unconsciously slouch when you walk

How you run around when you're excited
how you claim to love the dark
But still prefer the room to be lighted
To all the nerdyness that you are
And how you're the only person who can see my scars

People say that you're crazy
Well maybe you are
But you're amazing
Yes you're amazing

And your love of going against the crowd
Honestly, it makes my heart pound
Your cute little sneakers
Propped up against the bleachers
Sitting there
Waiting for me

Our hour long conversations
When half the time we have nothing to say
You know me; and all my complications
Your calm voice on the phone
Your excited voice when you're at home
I love everything about you

People say that you're crazy
Well maybe you are
But you're amazing
Yes you're amazing

I've never been in love before
But now I know I am
And by the way, do you know
I went insane when you held my hand?

People say that you're crazy
Well maybe you are
But you're amazing
Yes you're amazing
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thanks smile

Very cute. It's well articulated and relateable.

I especially liked this part:
"How you push your hair back when you talk
And unconsciously slouch when you walk"

My only problem was this line:
"And how you're the only person who can see my scars"

I don't have a problem with the line itself but I think it's a little out of place. The majority of the poem described the light and fluffy feelings of love, but that line is much deeper. I think maybe you should either expand upon the deepness (possibly add something about how you love him for the good as well as the bad) or just remove that line completely.

Other than that, I think it's great (though I do agree with Dressia about the "well")

I hope to see you post more work in the future. smile