I have been writing a small novella now for the past half year or so. The first third is finished, and I wanted to get some honest feedback. If you want to read it, follow this link:

http://noctuskerobian.deviantart.com/art/Guardian-pt1-123802899

Please....criticize honestly...I know my writing needs all the help it can get.

Guardian will be released in ten parts...this is only part one.