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 Posted: Fri Oct 31, 2008 9:41 pm
I'll post a GOOD short story I write, now and then. My blog has all of them, but some aren't good. Just a warning. I don't edit my stories often. My 'editor' gets busy with his own stuff, so yeah....
This be my Blog~
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Posted: Fri Oct 31, 2008 9:44 pm
Note: Titles
Normally, it'll go like this.
-----(Character's Name) Actual title.
So in the next story I post;
-----(Kale) Full Moon's Light.
Kale is the Character, and the title is "Full Moon's Light."
Enjoy, and feel free to post your opinion on this thread. :3
-----General rules apply, void where prohibited.
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Posted: Fri Oct 31, 2008 9:45 pm
-----(Kale) Full Moon's Light.
While pacing the closed confines of my small room, walking slowly clockwise about it, stepping gingerly over ravaged clothes and broken toys; I think to myself, "Kalenth, what if you had never of bitten me?" It's the one thing so often on my mind, what if it had never happened? I stopped in front of the window, boarded over and nailed shut- Which my parents did not long ago. Glancing to the only source of light, the single light bulb flickered and dimmed, but never went out. An oriental green paper lantern hung over it, so what was harsh white light now shone as a tinted glow that lit up the mayhem in my room. Some how, the lantern remained the only thing unscathed. Blue walls bore claw marks, and a bed laid on the floor broken and maimed; the torn blankets and pillows long since dragged to the floor to make a sort of nest where I could sleep. I resumed pacing around, watching where I placed my feet around the broken Lego castle my brother had made, my muffled footsteps the only sound in what I was sure was an empty house. Soft rain began to pound the roof outside; and there was no doubt that it was a miserable day out there. With the sky threatening to drizzle all day for not a ray of sunlight shone through the small cracks between the wood planks over the window since I had awaken.
"If you hadn’t of bitten me," I started talking to myself as the air took on a cold chill. "I wouldn’t be stuck here now." I paused to stare at a shattered mirror, the pieces partially picked up and it reflected a fractured image of my green eyes. "And if not for you…” This had all started, like so many other things, with Kalenth. If it weren’t for him, for that monster who had cursed me with this ‘gift’, then I would never have been a captive in my own house. Had that silver-tongued devil never of pounced on me that day- I wouldn't be in such a hellish situation. Waiting until my family grew the nerve to turn me in, and with each sunrise I cannot see, I’m another day closer to my impending doom.
I start to pace again, edging around the ruined mirror and surprised I had not worn down the carpet in my path. There was no use dwelling on the past, "I can take out my revenge when the time comes…" Its better now to move ahead, better to run like a rabbit than be slaughtered as a sow raised for a meal. Either way, I am as a caged animal. I stride to the door, bolted and chained shut. Laying a hand on it, I feel my animalistic furry grow, "I can't wear the name Kale anymore; it is too close to his." My hand curled into a fist, and I ran through names I could call myself instead. I glanced to my dresser; gnawed at as if a wild dog had taken a liking to it. "Fang? No…" My eyes turn towards the gouged walls. "Claw? Talon?" I shook my head; nothing felt right on my tongue. "Wolf…?" I nodded, and turned back to the door pausing to taste the name on my lips again. "It's perfect." As I closed my eyes, I seized hold of the fury welling up inside me. I added kindling with well seasoned wood to that inner fire by thinking of my escape. My freedom. And finally seeing the sunrise again.
~To be continued. Maybe~
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Posted: Wed Nov 12, 2008 5:11 pm
Oooh, nice! I wish I could write good short stories... I always have trouble being... short... lol! They all seem to not really end...
I have lots of ideas, I'm just too lazy to write them @.@
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Posted: Sat Dec 27, 2008 11:19 pm
Wow, that's pretty cool. Although, if I'm allowed to critisize and not just compliment, I must express my distaste at Kale choosing the new name 'Wolf'. It's to simple in my opinion, to simple, to conventional.
And to obvious.
Other than that though, I have to say, I want more of this story.
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Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 4:43 pm
I haven't written a short story in FOREVER...! At least, not since last year. I always find it hard to make them... ya know... short xD
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Posted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 2:30 pm
SO don't. Make them long, and separate them into parts.
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