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 Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 7:22 am
Thyme Willowbrook The poem is okay, I guess. I don't mean to be a pest, and thank you for the complment on the short piese I submitted, but I asked people specificly not to quote entire pieses of writing, it's okay for now, but next time just cut it down to the parts you want to talk about. Sorry again. Shadow-Savant Ok here's a poem I wrote YEARS ago before I even knew that poetry could be devoid of rhyme. lawl, this is really quite cute. I can tell that you were pretty young, and alsothat this is probably for a girl. Thanks for sharing. Anybody else willing to submit anything from when they were young? Nebel Rabenschwarz I write... Just not in english.. sweatdrop Well What language is it in, if it's German, I could probably get the gist of it. Submit it anyway! We'll break out the translators! rofl
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 7:25 am
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 7:31 am
MrJimmy Thyme Willowbrook The poem is okay, I guess. I don't mean to be a pest, and thank you for the complment on the short piese I submitted, but I asked people specificly not to quote entire pieses of writing, it's okay for now, but next time just cut it down to the parts you want to talk about. Sorry again.
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 8:11 am
Thyme Willowbrook Hopeless Love (Confronting the Villain)
by S. Houser Wow... speachless. This is the kind of quality poem I expect to see published someday, if it isn't already. Great job.
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 8:12 am
Thyme Willowbrook MrJimmy Thyme Willowbrook The poem is okay, I guess. I don't mean to be a pest, and thank you for the complment on the short piese I submitted, but I asked people specificly not to quote entire pieses of writing, it's okay for now, but next time just cut it down to the parts you want to talk about. Sorry again. Oh, thank you!
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 10:53 am
MrJimmy Thyme Willowbrook Hopeless Love (Confronting the Villain)
by S. Houser Wow... speachless. This is the kind of quality poem I expect to see published someday, if it isn't already. Great job. Thanks muchly. And yes, actually. It was published a few years back. Although I don't think the book is in print anymore.
And no, it wasn't published by Poetry.com. For one thing, it's way too long for that place, and for another, I have much higher standards than that. whee
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 10:55 am
MrJimmy Nebel Rabenschwarz I write... Just not in english.. sweatdrop Well What language is it in, if it's German, I could probably get the gist of it. Submit it anyway! We'll break out the translators! rofl Close, but no cigar. wink Swedish. :3 But I haven't written anything in quite a while so my old ones are just... Not me. I'll post the one I'm writing on now when it's finished. :3
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 12:17 pm
Nebel Rabenschwarz MrJimmy Nebel Rabenschwarz I write... Just not in english.. sweatdrop Well What language is it in, if it's German, I could probably get the gist of it. Submit it anyway! We'll break out the translators! rofl Close, but no cigar. wink Swedish. :3 But I haven't written anything in quite a while so my old ones are just... Not me. I'll post the one I'm writing on now when it's finished. :3 Awsome! *yells* Hey guys! I got a Sweedish guy to post!
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 12:19 pm
Thyme Willowbrook MrJimmy Thyme Willowbrook Hopeless Love (Confronting the Villain)
by S. Houser Wow... speachless. This is the kind of quality poem I expect to see published someday, if it isn't already. Great job. Thanks muchly. And yes, actually. It was published a few years back. Although I don't think the book is in print anymore.
And no, it wasn't published by Poetry.com. For one thing, it's way too long for that place, and for another, I have much higher standards than that. whee *awe struck* *Yells* Hey guys! I got a person who was published to post!
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 10:09 pm
MrJimmy Shadow-Savant Ok here's a poem I wrote YEARS ago before I even knew that poetry could be devoid of rhyme. lawl, this is really quite cute. I can tell that you were pretty young, and alsothat this is probably for a girl. Thanks for sharing. Anybody else willing to submit anything from when they were young? Actually it wasn't for anyone in particular. I'd never even had someone interested in me when I wrote that. I just had it come to me so I wrote it down. confused I don't know what the inspiration was or why I wrote it. That was when I was 19 actually, almost 5 years. Feels like more since I've grown a lot more over the past 4 years than I had in all my teenage years.
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 10:45 pm
I would read that.. but I'm too tired (1:30 in the mourning, and I haven't gotten a full nights rest in weeks)
So I'll write a poem thing instead off the top of my head
(stupid music wil lthrow me off... )
I sits in a shadowed corner
somewhere in my mind
whereI can control these thought of mine
Where I can control these flowing tears...
WHy can't I just, hold my fears?
(that was too short lol)
There was once a man who lived long ago
and many a man claimed he was hero
He held the rock at bay while the otehrs ran
He sure was one hell of a man
And as soon as they were clear he started to cry
For he knew he was about to die
And he let go of that mighty boulder
And he pushed to the ground and was pinned under
as the rock went flying back on down the hill
The sounds of his bones snapping was sharp and shrill
There's a plaque on the cursed stone
Laying at the bottom of the valley, all alone
It's shining words are even set in gold
'Through death this rock has shown
That a single man can't stand alone'
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Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 11:10 pm
Thyme Willowbrook Hopeless Love (Confronting the Villain)
by S. Houser
Simply amazing 3nodding Had fun reading it.... Rate it higher then any non-professional poem I've read yet. And higher then alot of professional ones as well
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Posted: Sat Apr 15, 2006 4:26 pm
A spontaneous piece, out of need.Twilight And where shall we meet? Words whisper into the streets pitter patter, rain falls to the ground eyes lock, hopes found But where shall we meet? a question so sweet harder, rain pounds into your hair lips lock, so unfair For where shall we meet? no longer feel my feet pitter patter, rain slows to a drawl hand lock, let go I never shall.
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Posted: Sat Apr 15, 2006 7:39 pm
twilight365 A spontaneous piece, out of need. another masterpiese from Twilight. *snaps*
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Posted: Sat Apr 15, 2006 8:22 pm
twilight365 A spontaneous piece, out of need. The overall feeling of this is greeeat. <33 But there are rough parts, as in most poems. ;3 "rain pounds into your hair" is just too long for this short poem. :3 "no longer feel my feet" i don't understand this. maybe if you explained it to me? drawl and shall don't rhyme, shall is a higher "a" sound than drawl.
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