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[Royal Taorito]

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Your Aaron

 

[Royal Taorito]

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Rexnov

Just a couple things real quick.
1. PA Primal Scream: This is denied, as it affects opponents on a metaphysical level. It would have to be submitted as a custom technique. If it were something that affected just you in certain circumstances, that would be different, but as it stands, this PA will not work.

2. Archetype: Power is not an archetype. Did you mean Fighter? You can find the bonuses from this Archetype here.

3. Stamina: You get an additional [15] stamina from having [5] points in Power. See here for more stat bonuses.

 

[Royal Taorito]

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Old Rabbit

I'm sorry, I just realized I never got back to you regarding this. .-.

PA Sensory Evasion: The main issue with it was your first PA: Sensory Evasion. You would be able to make a custom technique that temporarily hides your chakra signature, but it cannot be a permanent effect. I would recommend looking at the non-shinobi class Tracker, and the C-rank discipline Obscure. Basically with it, sensory techniques used against require an [1] rank increase in order to glean information from the Obscured. That would be the extent of capabilities I could allow with a PA.

Skill Points: E-rank characters have 10 skill points to distribute amongst the various sills. Some Archetypes give bonus skill points but the one you've chosen, Acrobat, does not, and I don't see any other source of bonus skill points.

That's all! Fix those things and you'll be good.

 

[Royal Taorito]

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Ningishzida

Just FYI, the bonuses for Juggernaut might be changing. I've told Lan to fix it, and we know how far that's gotten. >>

 

[Royal Taorito]

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LavenderandVelvet

Firstly, are you starting at E rank or D rank?

If E-rank, you're stats and energy pools, as well as your skills, reflect starting with a class, which you get at D-rank, but the profile shows you as only having 250 exp. 500 is required for D-rank, or you'll have 500 exp starting out if you choose to start at D. I'm assuming because of the rest of your profile, you're starting at D.

Regardless, stats are a bit off. The Fighter archetype gives you a +2 to your Power stat in exchange for a -1 or -2 in any of the other stats. So you could, say, take a -1 in Agility and Chakra, or a -2 in Chakra, or something. Then, I assume, if you're starting at D-rank, you chose to put your points in Power and Intelligence.

Also, to clarify for non-bloodline bonuses, you choose [1] item at a time. So one item from High Tier is [6] points, and one item from Low Tier is [2] points. You don't get the whole list of stuff.

That aside, you can use a Personal Attribute to give yourself some ryo when you start posting, but all ryo labeled 'starting ryo' disappears after character creation. By taking one of the starting kits, you use up the ryo granted by your archetype, but any additional (such as any gained from non-bloodline bonuses) you can still use to purchase more items. Any left over then vanishes once your character is approved.

Chakra/Stamina Pool: Starting at D-rank cuts the amount of chakra/stamina you would have had at E-rank in half. So rather than [100], you have [50] in each. From there, you get [125] to each from having Tracker class (only once, since you don't get your second class til C-rank). You also get an additional [15] Stamina from having [5] points in Power. So at this point, your pools are:
• Chakra: 175
• Stamina: 190
If you choose one of the options for more chakra/stamina from the non-bloodline bonuses, this of course stacks as well.

Proficiencies: You never need to put more than one proficiency point into a single item on the list, unless otherwise specified (such as intensive weaponry takes [2] points). So, as an example for what you have:
• [1] point into Single Handed Light Weapons - This unlocks all weapons in this category to be used at [E] rank.
• [1] point in Brass Knuckles - To allow you to train your Brass Knuckles beyond [E] rank.
• [1] point to Single Weapon Combat - Unlocks it to be trained.

That's only [3] of your [7] (if you're starting at D-rank) points. I would recommend also:
• [1] point in Medium Ranged Weapons - Unless you don't intend on using the bow you get in your kit. You cannot use it at all without a point here.
• [1] point in Longbow - Not required unless you want to use your bow beyond E-rank.
• [1] point in Unarmed Combat - Works alongside your Brass Knuckles. A little hard to punch with them if you don't know how to punch.
• [1] point in your choice of Offensive, Defensive, or Grappling Unarmed Combat - So you can punch or block beyond E-rank.

 

[Royal Taorito]

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Rexnov

PAs: Not necessarily wrong, but more of a concern. Per Lan, you have to choose between having Beast of the Hunt and Termination, due to the worry of exploiting a finite resource. Beast of the Hunt has a flaw in that if you deplete an area of its creatures, then there's no guarantee that a trail will be found. Not to mention, this wouldn't work in the middle of a town, so the counter would stop when you enter a town. It would likewise need clarification of what type of creature. By the description I can assume Unnatural Animals.

The other concern is that it's crossing into Tracker territory without even having the proper skill. My recommendation for the closest outcome to this is to keep Termination and to use your other PA to unlock the Tracker skill 'Hunting - Unnatural Animals'. This will only give you [1] point in the skill, but you'll be able to put skill points into it after it's unlocked. You can use Foraging for it, but Foraging is very limited in comparison, and will probably get you, at best, trails for C-rank creatures.

Chakra Pool: I'm assuming this was supposed to be [150] not [1500]. Also, for Stamina, if you haven't already factored it in, you get [15] for having [5] points in Power. Make sure to check the Stats page for any other bonuses.

Skill and Proficiency Points: Not wrong technically, but you get an additional [7] points per rank per class starting at D-rank. So D-rank gives you [7], C+ [14]. Same goes for Proficiencies. If it's not already added in, you get [1] per rank starting at D.

Small Discrepancy: Just something I saw: Strengths mention that she's good at farming, but you don't have farming as a skill?

Fears: I could be wrong, but I think we still require [3] fears.

 

[Royal Taorito]

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Rexnov

 

[Royal Taorito]

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Holy Rinaku

Non-Bloodline Bonuses: You actually get a couple bonuses for not having a bloodline! Check out our Profile Guide, in the first spoiler labeled "Tell Me Some Basics" for a list of non-bloodline bonuses. You get [8] points to spend, and each item in a tier of items costs the number of points listed (aka a Greater PA bonus costs [4] points). If you've already chosen them, please list them next to your answer regarding your lineage.

Classes: I assume you're starting at D rank? Just to make sure you're aware, you start with [1] class, and get your second class at C rank. It's fine to list both classes you want but you will not gain any benefits or be able to use your second Discipline until C rank.

Also on a quick note, here's the list of changes for starting at D-rank:
• Start with [500] exp and [1] class, as well as all that comes with that class
• Only gain [50] of the E-rank chakra/stamina instead of [100]
• Does not gain slots, skills points, or proficiency points from the selected Archetype (this does not affect bonuses gained from the stats themselves)
• Must select one [1] of the starter kits from the Character Starter Shop, rather than choosing items. However, can choose any of the kits.

PAs: Due to the nature of the wording of your PAs, they're just flavor text and do not actually do anything. I'll make a couple recommendations for you though.

Pilot: Since there's not guild mechanic for 'piloting' a craft, this PA doesn't and will not do anything. She can be a great pilot just via roleplay without mechanics getting involved. I would recommend changing it altogether. Maybe, since you're going Tinker, you could do something like: "Flight-based Automatons require one [1] less charge to control, to a minimum of one." Automatons are 'creatures' that already exist in the world that Tinkers have the ability to reprogram and control, similarly to puppets. Unlike puppets, though, they will continue to carry out their task until their commands are changed or they are destroyed. You can talk to Lan for more details regarding them.

Improved Circuitry: Unlike SN, we don't use descriptives for increases/decreases. All modifiers are based on a half [.5] or a whole [1] (or 1.5, 2, 2.5, etc.). My recommendation for this one is something like: "Flight-based Automatons or Aircrafts modified by her gain a one [1] point increase to their Agility stat, and attacks are a half [.5] rank faster in physical speed."

You Know Our Motto: While there's technically nothing wrong with this one, I just want to make you aware that the only bonuses gained by temporarily increased stats are any of the bonuses from stats at multiples of [5] (so [5], [10], [15]). Otherwise, the +1 to all stats only helps in overpowering opponents when the exact same rank attack is used (including bonuses). This is called 'head-to-head combat', and the winner is determined by who has the greater of the appropriate stat. So you are welcome to keep it as +1 to all stats, and it has the potential to provide greater bonuses than just a strength/speed increase, but it's less likely to provide said bonus. If you want to curb that chance and give everyone a straight-up buff, I'd recommend a "half [.5] rank increase to physical and spiritual strength and speed for five [5] posts."

Chakra/Stamina Pool: If you choose to start at D, you only get 50 chakra/stamina as a base (whereas those that start at E get 100). Then with Tinker pools, you'd be at [225] and [125]. Of course, if you chose the [+50] chakra/stamina from the non-bloodline bonuses, these would be correct, just make sure you list which bonuses you chose under 'lineage'.

Stats: They're correct as they are but you get two [2] more points to assign for D-rank, and you'll gain [2] more for each rank following.

Skill and Proficiency Points: Skills especially are critical to a Tinker's ability. I would recommend looking through the Skill Guide for explanations on how the various skills work. In order to 'tinker' automatons and other electronics, there are four Tinker specific skills that you'll want to invest points in. Starting at D-rank, you have [10] (E-rank) + [7] (D-rank), and you'll gain an additional [7] per rank per class starting at C-rank. Basic, non-Tinker skills are not necessarily required, but you will not be able to make or do much of anything beneficial without them (such as the various cooking skills, or foraging, or first aid (field triage)). This is all explained in the guide.

As for proficiency points, your character does not know how to properly wield a weapon that proficiency points have not been assigned to. If that's your intention, that's fine. A quick summary of how they work, in case it's not, and the guide can be found here for the lists of weapon categories and weapons:
1. Choose a category (Light Single-Handed, Medium Single-Handed, etc) to put one [1] point into. All weapons in that category can then be used at E-rank for unnamed attacks. No further points need to be put into the category.
2. If you would like to use a weapon beyond E-rank, pick a weapon you'd like from the unlocked category and put one [1] point into it. That weapon can then be trained up from E-rank by training a certain number of posts ([2] for D-rank, [3] for C, etc), up to S-rank. No further points need to be put into that weapon.
3. Rinse and repeat. You can unlock other categories, or unlock other weapons in categories you've chosen to be trained. For this character you get [2] (E-rank) + [1] (D-rank), and gain [1] additional per rank from there.

Ryo and Inventory: Your 'starting ryo' that you get from your Archetype is for use only in the Character Starter Shop. Once it's spent there, any leftover disappears, and you start with 0. Which takes us to Inventory.

Everything on your character needs to be listed here, including clothes, weapons, armor, bags, items, etc. If your character does not have it listed, they don't have it. In your case, your character is naked and would have to just carry around the items they have on them. By starting at D-rank you are required to choose one of the Starter Kits (2nd post).

Edit: Lan says you can keep the items you have listed.

Starting Technique: Every character gets a technique starting out, up to C-rank, to start with. This can be any technique or talent from our lists, including Eiseijutsu, as long as your character 1. has the correct element for the technique you want (if ninjutsu is chosen) and 2. has the bloodline of the technique you want (if bloodline technique is chosen). You may also submit a custom technique if you want instead, up to D-rank.