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 Posted: Wed May 14, 2008 3:46 pm
This is a poem I wrote (if you saw this on deviantart.com its because I am XdrownmeslowlyX on there too!) in about 10-15 minutes. Its nothing much, but its how I feel...
What Do You See?
You look into her eyes
And what do you see?
A million good-byes
Someone not being who they want to be
You see tears not cried,
Unreleased to the outside
But you know that inside
Her heart has already died
You look into her soul
And what do you see?
A heart ice cold
Death ready to unfold
You see a young girl
Hardly a teen,
Always unoticed
And always unseen
So fed up she's
Ready to die
Unable to cry
Waiting for the final good-bye
comments/criteques?
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Posted: Fri May 23, 2008 3:59 am
Anyone? I really want to know what I can do to make this poem better!
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