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A Girl I Once Knew

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luna_luv_manga

PostPosted: Sat Jan 12, 2008 6:47 pm
This is a story of a girl I actually knew. I still know her actually, but as the poem states, she's changed so much it's like she's a diffrent person.


“A girl I once knew”

A Girl I Once Knew
A warm heart
turned cold.
A small girl's story
never told.

A smile on her face
to let everyone know
that she was just fine
and never alone.

But a lie built up
that never came out
a secret she locked up tight
without one doubt.

Anger and hate
poisoned her mind
but she was unaware of this
the entire time.

She could never imagine
of her future to come.
When her soul would be dead
and her body numb.

But she lived on her life
with a smile on her face
until she finally collapsed
and left no trace.

I'm not saying she's living
or saying that she's dead
for it’s hard to tell these days
what goes on in her head.

And now I’ve revealed the story
of a girl I knew way back.
An old friend of mine
whose pure heart turned black.

This is the latest poems I've written. I have not posted anything for a long time because I've been working on this one. (Hopefully it's ok after all that work I put into it.)  
PostPosted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 2:35 pm
u r ADORABLE!

This is a nice poem, you're off to a great start!!!!!  

MoDeStTrUtH


PixieSunBelle

PostPosted: Tue Jun 17, 2008 9:51 am
thats so pretty!  
PostPosted: Sat Aug 02, 2008 1:51 am
Wow, that's pretty powerful. It's energetic, (almost bouncy) I think, because of the rhythm it has when you read it, but the underlying message is so much more ominous. It's like a contrast in elements...in a good way....if that makes sense. xd  

ChrisJS

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