Perseverance

• Artist: velvetveela
• Description: This is probably one of my best poems, I'm very fond of it. Everyone comprehends things differently, so tell me what you think. (:
  
• Date: 07/27/2011
• Tags: perseverance poems

Sometimes it feels as though the world has turned and left me here.
With no direction, I face my fear.
I stand on the dark side of this heartless earth
while light shines on the new birth.

Trembling knees hold a weak, defenseless being
while the presence of my gaining past I am not seeing.
And the sound of silence drives one mad;
how to forget it all, all you've ever had.

And shaky hands hold an unsteady world.
An unfit mother holds a baby girl.
And old spinal chord holds an ever-learning brain.
Two young lovers hold each other in the rain.

We hold on tight and try never to be parted
but everything ends and goes back to where it started.
And the tightest grip or the strongest man
cannot grasp time in the palm of his hand.

Comments

[Blind Blindness]

Yay, I'm glad I interpreted it the way you meant it to be then, and you're welcome =]

[velvetveela]

Thank you! biggrin Long responses are cool.
You interpreted it the way I honestly wanted it to be. I honestly tried my best with how I ordered the poem, because I almost had the second and thrid stanza swapped but then I wrote the last one and it worked out how I wanted it to. :3

[Blind Blindness]

I want to also add that I liked the 3rd stanza. I thought it was creative, especially "And old spinal cords hold an ever-learning brain." I also think the way you did a good job of tying the poem as far as the time sequence of the feelings xD...yeah, so, mhmm

[Blind Blindness]

I really liked the poem. It wasn't too cliche and I felt it drove home the message. For me, the message being of struggling, forgetting yet remembering painfully, and facing hardships alone. Also it pretty much describes life and how people feel sometimes when they're weak or when they want to go back but they know they can't. We often don't have time to stop things, and hindsight is 20/20. Lol sorry for the long response, but I wanted to give my honest assessment.